First Narrative Fashion Film (2:30) feedback on clarity of narrative?

[FLING FLING]

https://youtu.be/Fje21rQ7zEA

Things I learnt:

- Timelapse with LEDs is a lot of fun and looks great as lighting.
- Recording subtitles in another language no matter how organized you are is tough!
- Models can be really versatile and if you have faith, they'll come thru!

Would love to hear any thoughts, mainly does the narrative make sense, does it translate well?

[Ed_David]

I think it's very dreamy and interesting and moody - great job!

[PannySVHS]

Beautiful images and nice pace and rhythm. Very encouraging and inspiring piece. If any criticism makes sense, I´d say your film is loosing some pace a little bit from 1.29min to 1.47min, because sequence of images seems a little bit repetetive to me, also without clear motivation of montage- closing shot of it from 1.47min on is beautiful again though and well motivated. Also, I´d prefer smaller and higher placed subtitles, also not in Italics. By the way, what camera did you shoot with?

Cheers and Thank you for inspiration!